Tuesday, May 24, 2011

Power of Tension Blogfest - Ruby and Tom



So Cally Jackson and Rachel Morgan decided to have The Power of Tension blogfest with a great idea behind it. Tension. Romantic, jealousy, rivals in families...whatever.  I thought this would be fun so I entered an excerpt from Ruby Dawn, a novel releasing later this year. 


Ben is a nice guy, a stable guy, that Ruby just accepted a date with. Tom is Ruby's love from her teen years. He disappeared ten years ago and now is back. On the right side of the law this time, he's at the center of a DEA sting involving her medical clinic that has just been vandalized...




Ruby Dawn

“I’ll see you tonight, then?” Ben asked in a needlessly loud voice.
“Yes, Ben. Pick me up here at eight, okay?”
He nodded and left. I watched him leave then turned and frowned at Tom.
He flashed me a look of complete enjoyment. “Let me guess, coffee?”
I rolled my eyes and pushed Tom down the back hall toward the rear door.
“Don’t you need to be somewhere dangerous?” I thought about his job and my heart wrenched with worry. “What about your cover, Tom? You’re not even supposed to be here, are you?”
“That can’t be concern I hear.” Tom turned and stopped himself with his arms across the doorway. He smiled down at me and my face flushed. He put his forehead against mine. “You’re not staying here alone, are you?” He whispered, breath brushing my eyelids.
Tom never liked any space between us.
I stepped back, my hands going to my hips. “What makes you think I’m staying here?”
Tom cocked his head to the side and folded his arms. He already knew.
“How…?” I asked.
“It’s my job to know about people, Ruby. I can’t believe you gave up your apartment to keep this place open.”
I took another step away from him and looked back down the hall toward the ruined office. Anger flaring at the destruction, I shook my head. “You don’t know what I went through to get this clinic running. I can’t just walk away.”
Pain flashed behind his eyes, “You’re right, I don’t.”
I regretted my words immediately. “I wasn’t trying to get a dig in, Tom. I didn’t mean—”
“Shhh,” Tom whispered. He took my hand in his and kissed my palm sending a ripple through me. “Its okay, I know what you meant, Ruby. And you’re right about what you said the other night too,” he breathed and leaned closer.
Barely able to think, I stood frozen by his nearness. “What I said?”
He smiled, so close now that I could feel his lips move. “You said that I don’t know you anymore. That I need to get to know you all over again.”
“I’m pretty sure that’s not what I said,” I breathed.


I hope you hop on over to the other entrants here and have some fun with reading their excerpts!  Until next time...Go Write!

25 comments:

Gabriela Lessa said...

Great entry, Raquel! All kinds of questions lingering there!

Vicki Tremper said...

Ooh, what happens next?

J.C. Martin said...

Ooh...the yummy kind of tension! :) Great stuff. Just a typo I noticed: "Tom turned and stopped himself with *is* arms across the doorway."

Raquel Byrnes said...

Thank you so much, Gabriela and Vicki! And hug to J.C. for her nice words and a type catch! I fixed it. :)

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Ruby should have learned long ago that men hear what they want to hear. LOL. A lot of unspoken sexual attraction here, leading to tension and questions. Great job, Roland

Crystal Collier said...

Love this relationship--and the intensity.

Charity Bradford said...

I remember reading this scene before. I still love it and can't wait to read more of it. The tension is great because its so subtle for most of the time.

And I love when Tom says, "I need to get to know you all over again." That all over made me think naughty things. ;)

Brenda Drake said...

I completely fell in love with your characters in this small scene. Excellent job and I can feel the tension between the two. Yay! :D

DEZMOND said...

lovely story, Raquel :)

Myne Whitman said...

Nice writing and story too.

Damyanti said...

I love the way you end it!

Trisha said...

Okay, I'm liking this Tom guy. yummy :)

Raquel Byrnes said...

Thank you so much...I really loved participating and reading everyone's entries!

Sharon Bayliss said...

Wonderful dialog. I love the sexy undertone. Congratulations on the immiment release of Purple Knot!

Sari Webb said...

Ohh, good job! Definitely want to know what happens between these two. ;)

Kittie Howard said...

Roland's right, lots of unspoken sexual tension that makes the reader want more. Great job!

I'm dropping in from the fest. Nice to meet you!

Ellie Garratt said...

Ooo...sizzling hot tension. I want more!

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Lady Gwen said...

Ben doesn't stand a chance, that's all I have to say!! Nice job:)

Susan Fields said...

Poor Ben - doesn't sound like he has a chance. :)

Raquel Byrnes said...

I'm so happy you all liked the excerpt. It certainly was fun writing it.

Loved the blogfest...reading all the tension-filled entries was tons of entertainment.

Great job, everyone!

Rachel Morgan said...

Ooh, I like the dynamic between Ruby and Tom! Definitely some tension there ;-)
Thanks for entering.

Crystal said...

Oooh, suspenseful ending! Very nice. I also liked your use of the sense of touch/feel.

stickynotestories said...

Oooh, that gave me shivers. The good kind ;) Very nicely done.

Susanna Leonard Hill said...

Ooh, love this! Dying to know what happens next!

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